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Clear writing delivers bottom-line benefits.

Clear writing is an essential business skill – one that generates revenue for your organization.
Written May 18, 2011, read 3160 times since then.
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Not long ago, Washington State Governor Chris Gregoire ordered all state agencies to adopt what she called “plain talk” principles. Since then, more than 2,000 state employees have attended training to help them write in clear, everyday language. And they’re seeing results in more than just concise memos.

For example, by revising one letter based on clear Persuasive Writing principles, the Department of Revenue tripled the number of businesses paying the sales tax on products they purchased out of state. As a result, the department collected over $800,000 extra in tax revenue.

“Simple changes can have profound results,” said Janet Shimabukuro, manager of the department’s taxpayer services program. “Plain talk isn’t only rewriting, it’s rethinking your approach and really personalizing your message to the audience and to the reader.”

That’s sweet music here at The Writing Workshop. Over the years we’ve been teaching Persuasive Writing that helps business learn to think clearly and write what they mean. We encourage people to answer three fundamental questions before they actually start writing.

1.    Why am I writing?
2.    Who is my reader?
3.    What do I expect to accomplish?

Answering those simple questions will make a dramatic difference in what you say and how you say it. Here are more Clear Writing Principles for you

Change is the only constant. 

The fact is, written and spoken language evolves over time. What used to be acceptable usage in our language is now often confusing or archaic. In fact, many grammar “rules” were never rules at all, but rather more like urbane legends (pun intended). 

I know some of you are about to cringe when you read the next sentence. But that’s something I’ll have to put up with. (See, I knew you’d cringe.)

In The Elements of Style, my pals Mr. Strunk and Mr. White tell me that it’s true, once upon a time, crusty old teachers told their students never to end a sentence with a preposition. Yet Strunk & White go on to say, “Not only is the preposition acceptable at the end … it is more effective in that spot than anywhere else.”

Thanks guys!

That preposition rule your eighth-grade teacher drilled into your head, like many so-called grammar rules, is a remnant of Latin grammar. It’s not a rule. And it doesn’t apply to modern American English.

What’s more, the experts don’t always agree on the rules – literally. 

Take that word for example. Literally. You know when your co-worker Amanda says, “I, like, literally died when my boss caught me playing online poker.”

You roll your eyes say, “No, Amanda, you didn’t literally die. You're literally alive, standing here telling me this.”

Well, turns out, Amanda may be more literal than you thought.

Take a look.

The Chicago Manual of Style says: 

Literally means ‘actually; without exaggeration.’ It should not 
be used oxymoronically in the figurative sense…”

The Associate Press Stylebook agrees:

Literally means in an exact sense. Figuratively means in an analogous sense, but not in the exact sense.”

Two old reliable reference sources must be right, right?

Not necessarily. Webster’s New World College Dictionary contradicts them:

Literally is often used as an intensive to modify a word or phrase that is being used figuratively.”


My preference is to use literally when I mean actually not sort of. But that’s not based on a rule. It’s based on my desire to be clear to my reader above all else.

How do you handle business writing if the rules are elusive and evolving? Heed The Writing Workshop's Golden Rule of Business Writing: Be Clear. Above all else.

If you get mired in the muck of rules you’ll only confuse and annoy your readers. 

Here’s a great example of confusing and annoying business jargon:

Before: 

The Department of Labor and Industries has been notified that you did not receive the State of Washington warrant listed on the attached Affidavit of Lost or Destroyed Warrant Request for Replacement, form F242.

Here’s an example of clear writing:

After: 

Have you cashed your Department of Labor and Industries check yet? The state Treasurer's Office informed us that a check we sent you has not been cashed.

So what's next?

Over the next few days, think about the people in your company who churn out confusing writing all day long. And imagine the negative effect those bewildering reports and proposals and emails have on you, your clients, and your business partners.

Then focus on one goal: Be clear.

You'll see results. All the way to the bank.

Learn more about the author, John Sturtevant.

Comment on this article

  • Copywriter and Editor, Specializing in Website Content 
Seattle, Washington 
Russell Smith
    Posted by Russell Smith, Seattle, Washington | May 25, 2011

    I’ve heard of using “Plain Talk” Principles to make documents easier to understand from a friend who works for the State of Washington, and he’s seen productivity go up through the use of clear, everyday language.

    In this case, the phrase “our tax dollars at work” can be used without irony attached.

  • Business Writing Coach 
Houston, Texas 
John Sturtevant
    Posted by John Sturtevant, Houston, Texas | May 25, 2011

    Hey Russell,

    You said it so non-ironically!

    Here's to your friend, may he spread the good word!

    :-)

  • Time Liberation Agent 
Clackamas, Oregon 
Susan Lannis
    Posted by Susan Lannis, Clackamas, Oregon | May 26, 2011

    This is another dimension of a concept I work with - complexity increases fragility while simplicity increases stability.

    In this case simplicity is increasing effectiveness.

    Thanks Russell!

  • Tutor  / Proofreader/Editor 
Guelph, Ontario Canada 
Ronald Johnson
    Posted by Ronald Johnson, Guelph, Ontario Canada | May 26, 2011

    Well said, John !

    Many students, particularly secondary school, first-year university students, and some adult business writers, think that their writing must "sound" complex to prove their understanding of the material and higher-thinking skills. Instead, the writing is often convoluted, confusing, and mostly incomprehensible.

    You are so right to focus on those three fundamental questions.

    Also, the "rules" that are still taught in grade school (and sometimes secondary school) are often more conventions than true grammar rules.
    Another one that many people "over correct" is the use of the combination "Mary and I" vs "Mary and me."

    Clear, concise writing that informs the reader is the most useful writing of all.

    Nice article.

  • The ideas-to-action navigator on your road to results 
Carver, Minnesota 
Kathleen Watson
    Posted by Kathleen Watson, Carver, Minnesota | May 26, 2011

    John, I think you should add "translator" to your profile. If you hadn't translated the government-ese in the "State of Washington warrant" notice, I'm not sure I would have had a clue what they were saying. Great story - and great reminders.

    I wonder what would happen if we all focused more on being authentic and natural than on being "important" sounding...

  • Business Writing Coach 
Houston, Texas 
John Sturtevant
    Posted by John Sturtevant, Houston, Texas | May 27, 2011

    Susan,

    I love that concept - it's a cousin of Occam's Razor.

    Thanks for your comment.

  • Business Writing Coach 
Houston, Texas 
John Sturtevant
    Posted by John Sturtevant, Houston, Texas | May 27, 2011

    Ronald,

    You're spot on about that fundamental flaw in our education system.

    A big part of what I do is help business people "unlearn" what their high school English teachers taught them!

    You might imagine the frustration I've felt when I've seen how my son's teachers try to teach him"formal" writing. Blech!

    Hopefully, one day, she'll give him and me a break!

    John

  • Business Writing Coach 
Houston, Texas 
John Sturtevant
    Posted by John Sturtevant, Houston, Texas | May 27, 2011

    Kathleen,

    Funny! I'll add that next time I print my business cards!

    Thanks for your insightful and authentic comments.

    John

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